Imperceptible in, the autumn came. Jin Feng sends bright, golden Gui Piao is sweet, temporal is celebrating joyously its arrival, those who draped of all kinds is full-dress.
不知不觉中，秋天来了。金风送爽，金桂飘香，世间万物都欢庆着它的到来，披上了各色的盛装。
Maple is in what the autumn leaves in the season with this cool Bei flourish all the more, added a few minutes for desolate autumn festival. Maple page is red if fire is general, swaying in wind. This makes I thought of “ of a poem jockeys sit love maple Lin Wan, red leaves is red spent in Feburary. ” is maple leaves exuberantly not only, chrysanthemum also is worn in the in full bloom in wind. Chrysanthemum of 10 thousand birthday is elegant, atmosphere is dignified, chrysanthemum of the ovary and digestive glands of the crab is like the make threatening gestures like crab, petite daisy posse is round, tuft forms a cluster, of in threes and fours saying a private words, good not lively. In this gorgeous autumn, just see a flower, have what to seem to be short of? Sweet-scented osmanthus waves sweet 10 lis, like still be the same as in former years refreshing. Give every every sweet smell, delivering the good news that the autumn comes to them.
枫树在秋天这个悲凉的季节中开的格外茂盛，为凄凉的秋天增添了几分喜庆。枫叶红的如火一般，在风中摇曳着。这使我想到了一首诗“停车坐爱枫林晚，霜叶红于二月花。”不仅是枫树开得旺盛，菊花也在风中怒放着。黄色的万寿菊雍容华贵，大气端庄，蟹黄菊如螃蟹般张牙舞爪，娇小的雏菊一团团，一簇簇，三五成群的说着悄悄话，好不热闹。在这绚丽多彩的秋天里，只是看花，有好像缺了点什么？桂花飘香十里，还是同往年一样沁人心脾。将香气送给每家每户，向他们传递着秋天到来的喜讯。
Smell the good news that the autumn comes, farmer laugh must close not approach mouth, because, their field bumper harvest. Corn is wearing green military uniform, stand in viatic both sides, saluting autumnal advent ardently. The autumn moves back and forth between afield, told a joke to broomcorn, broomcorn laughs complexion is aglowly, quite do not have a back. Pomegranate was heard, laughed at all sorts of attitude, some Lie opened the mouth, some laugh defeated belly, return some belly laugh. Rice is golden, in sunshine beamed below, before the Jin Hai with crystalline light of a wave appears in us.
闻到秋天到来的喜讯，农民笑得合不拢嘴，因为，他们的田野丰收了。玉米穿着绿色的军装，站在道路的两旁，热烈迎接着秋天的到来。秋天穿梭在田野间，给高粱讲了个笑话，高粱笑得面色通红，挺不起腰杆。石榴听到了，笑出了各种姿态，有的咧开了嘴，有的笑破了肚皮，还有的捧腹大笑。稻子金黄，在阳光的照耀下，一片波光粼粼的金海出现在我们的眼前。
This waits for beautiful scenery, can you let me be intoxicated how among them?
此等美景，怎能不让我陶醉其中呢？
Perhaps be in other people eye, autumnal scenery is how bleak, gloomy, but in my heart, it is enthusiastic, it is the Jin Ju that broadens like intense blaze, bear, it is the scent that sweet-scented osmanthus hides into greenery, it is not desolate, it is on the earth before cold winter last attentive only, so not warm stopped, the person nature that know understands, except, how can day of “ my Yan Qiu gets the better of Chun Chao ” to say?
也许在旁人眼中，秋景是多么萧瑟、惨淡的，但在我心中，它是热烈的，是烈焰般绽开的金菊，是隐忍的，是桂花藏进绿叶的芳香，它并不凄凉，只是寒冬前大地上最后一抹温存，不那么暖罢了，懂的人自然懂，若不是，怎会有“我言秋日胜春朝”一说呢？
Of the beauty of the red, chrysanthemum of maple leaf, sweet-scented osmanthus sweet, add the joyance of the bumper harvest, the author is intoxicated at this autumn in, from the point of article whole, style or manner of writing is fluenter, the construction is reasonable, the language strength of young writer is some, the strength of observation and depict is in, this are worth to praise. But the feeling that the teacher feels small to the author can continue to dig the autumn to bring a person, young writer is very outstanding to the depict of the scenery, also showed the praise sentiment to autumnal scenery. But the share that oneself comprehend is relative for was deficient in a little a bit, because the “ drunk ” of this author appears,some flow at the surface, additionally the proposal is opening a direct bring out the theme, terminal part guileless is vivid, natural and fluent, it is the nods eyeball pen of full text.
枫叶的红、菊花的美、桂花的香，加上丰收的喜悦，作者陶醉于这秋天之中，从文章整体来看，行文比较流畅，结构合理，小作者的语言功底是有的，观察力和描写的功底都在，这一点值得表扬。但老师觉得小作者可以继续挖掘秋天带给人的感受，小作者对对景色的描写非常优秀，也表现出了对秋景的赞美之情。但是自己感悟的部分相对来说稍微欠缺了一点，因此作者的“醉”显得有些流于表面了，另外建议在开篇直接点题，结尾部分朴实生动，自然流畅，是全文的点睛之笔。