I had gone up now junior high school, still yearn for my elementary school career however.
我现在已经上初中了，却仍怀念我的小学生涯。
That is clean and neat, be full of the school of spark, the joyous sound of classmates laughs language always loaf about in campus. Just went in, of greet is a straightforward highway, the education building with one ivory flickering is in front, feeling letting a person is exceedingly sweet.
那是个干净整洁，充满着朝气的学校，同学们的欢声笑语总在校园中游荡。刚进去，映入眼帘的是一条笔直的大道，前面是一幢幢乳白色的教学楼，让人感觉非常的温馨。
Highway left is a beautiful garden, there are the flowers and plants of the rockery, tree that has similar big pineapple, profusion and Xiaochi pool inside, if you stand on the little bridge of pond upper part, can see concealed is like to be like showing big carp in the pond, have have greatly small, have Bai Yougong, very play skin is lovely. If you just see the breeder feeds a carp, you also can ask he wants a bit. Once, our class classmate gets together to feed a carp over, a bright red carp gives water suddenly more, in bouncing ” of the “ in sky, resembling is right we say: &You should learn Ldquo; well, like was brought up to resemble me, ' carp jumps dragon door ' . ”< WWw.ZuowEnBA.neT >
大道左边是一个美丽的花园，里面有假山、有类似大菠萝的树、缤纷的花草以及小池塘，若你站在池塘上方的小桥上，可以看到池塘里若隐若现的大鲤鱼，有大有小，有白有红，十分嬉皮可爱。若你刚好看到饲养员喂鲤鱼，你也可以问他要一点。有一次，我们班同学都聚在那儿喂鲤鱼，一只大红鲤鱼突然越出水面，在空中“跳跃”，像是对我们说:“你们要好好学习，长大了像我一样'鲤鱼跃龙门'。”
The highway goes after all right-handed, it is the building building that a rectangle enclosed circuit, that is 1, 2, the education building of 3 grade, the exterior find the scenery pleasing to both the eye and the mind of the building, attend class can hear read brightly sound, finish class the game voice that can hear joy, young fellow students are very polite also, can stroll in such campus, why be a happy thing?
大道走到底向右转，是一个长方形围了一圈的建筑楼，那是1、2、3年级的教学楼，大楼的外观赏心悦目，上课能听到朗朗的读书声，下课能听到欢乐的游戏声，小同学们也都很有礼貌，能在这样的校园中漫步，何不为一件快乐的事呢？
There still are a lot of interesting things in campus of course, interesting view, …… of house of basketball field, playground, billiards, badminton house, ping-pong house awaits a likelihood in those days is the reason with little age! Feel happy work is particularly much.
当然校园中还有许多好玩的事，好看的景，篮球场、操场、台球馆、羽毛球馆、乒乓球馆……那时候可能是年龄小的原因吧！感觉开心的事特别多。
I hide this good memory in the depth of my bottom of the heart, abounding my life, be full of my my life, alma mater, have predestined relationship good-bye!
我把这份美好的回忆藏在我心底深处，丰富着我的生活，充斥着我的我的人生，母校，有缘再见!
Liu joyfullies classmate, see this your composition, above all the teacher wants to remind you, the style of this composition is not argumentative writing, this is one writes scene narrative. Next, the theme of the composition is the pupil limit ” with unforgettable “ , career this word is understandable for “ life ” . But your composition content more it is the view that keeping elementary school school yard, and rather than your campus lives, campus lives should more the activity of side overweight character. Hope your medicine notices this. Finally, your composition language is opposite for vividder, but insufficient still, we can be complete in the composition many somes of depict, some more rhetorical, let a composition must have energy more. If sheet is told from the writing of the composition, write a composition or can encircle what can nod, compose according to azimuth order, make a composition very systimatic.
刘欣然同学，看完你的这篇作文，首先老师想提醒你，这篇作文的文体不是议论文哦，这是一篇写景记叙文。其次，作文的主题是“难忘的小学生涯”，生涯这个词可以理解为“生活”。但你的作文内容更多的是在写小学校园的景，而非你的校园生活，校园生活应该更侧重于人物的活动。希望你药注意这一点。最后，你的作文语言相对来说比较生动，但还不够，我们完全可以在作文里多些描写、多些修辞，让作文更加得有活力。如果单从作文的写作来讲，作文还是可圈可点的，按照方位顺序写作，使得作文很有条理哦。