Reread one part " on the west travel notes " after the content in, I think to reading a few the most interesting in answering bout that pass, the 16th times avalokitesvara courtyard abhor seeks baby Hei Fengshan to steal cassock quite this time, be in this time in, hei Fengshan's monster has not appeared, those who tell is the thing that then old monk steals cassock.
再读了一部分《西游记》里的内容后，我认为在读过的几回中最有意思的一回，第16回观音院憎谋宝贝黑风山怪窃袈裟这一回，在这一回中，黑风山的妖怪还未出现，讲的是那老和尚偷袈裟的事。
This time in what tell probably is the Tang Dynasty before monk and mahatma come to a temple, the abbot in the temple saw the Tang Dynasty baby cassock of the monk, rose to have an insatiable desire for read aloud, want to steal cassock, but the old practice that did not become final suicide secretly.
这一回中大概讲的是唐僧和大圣来到一座寺前，寺里的住持看到了唐僧的宝贝袈裟，起了贪念，想偷袈裟，但没有偷成最后自杀的故事。
I think to be answered than other, full text is more humorous and this time interesting. Often mix among them still of depict of this one character particularly intended significant, I think Wu Chengen is thought of is to want to pass this the name that old monk will come to to convey those dresses, egoistic person. Write Chen Helian place to think expressive meaning is about the same with Lu Xun, I think the person of heart of snake of mouth of this kind of Buddha should issue A nose hell.来自作文吧 zUOwENbA.net
我认为相比其它回，这一回全文比较幽默有趣。其中老和尚这一个人物刻画的特别有意有意义，我想吴承恩思是想通过这老和尚来表达那些衣服的名义，自私自利的人。就和鲁迅写陈和莲所想表达的意思差不多，我认为这种佛口蛇心的人就应该下阿鼻地狱。
Besides old monk outside this character, the show that I think Sun Wu is closing this time for nothing is very interesting also, awake in midnight when him, discover that group of bonze want to set fire, after burning oneself and master dead, he did not look for that the Dragon King, want some of water to come put out a fire, go up to the sky instead palace goes looking for day king to want a ‘ to avoid fire overspreads ’ to come to a tooth for a tooth, an eye for an eye, often decorticate that one angry bumps dead to be on the wall, went up Western Paradise.
除了老和尚这个人物外，我认为孙悟空在这一回合的表现也很有意思，当他在半夜醒来，发现那群和尚想放火，把自己和师傅烧死后，他没有去找那个龙王，要些水来灭火，反而上天宫去找天王要了个‘避火罩’来一个以牙还牙，以眼还眼，把那老剥皮气的一头撞死在墙上，上了西天。
Additional, I think the expression depict of those monks in article is gotten first-rate, very interesting also. Such depict are in article, numerous abhor saw, hemp of each bone soft body, kowtow of on bended knees is dripping the tear: &What Ldquo; hates me not to know a person then is old decorticate, make the heart uses a heart, do to you killed oneself instead now! All living creatures in ” article people, the skill construction that connects oneself (? ? ) scolded to often decorticate, can be imagined they are to have how to fear Sun Wu is empty ah, also know they are the people of a flock of change one's view according to circumstances.
另外，我认为文中那些僧人们的神情描写得非常好，也很有趣。文中是这样描写的，众憎见了，个个骨软身麻，跪着磕头滴着泪道:“恨我那不识人的老剥皮，使心用心，给你做今日反害了自己啊！”文中的众生们，连自己的本事施工（？？）都骂成了一个老剥皮，可想而知他们是有多么害怕孙悟空呀，也知道他们是一群见风使舵的人。
Anyhow, " on the west travel notes " it is this very good famous work, there is very a lot of more story inside and absorbing.
总之，《西游记》是本很不错的名著，里面有很多很多的故事而且都非常有趣。
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小作者有自己的看法，这很好，可惜就可惜在写得混乱，严重影响了小作者你自己的表达，另外部分地方句子还写得不通顺，这也是大问题呀！建议平时写完不要忙着停笔，而是应该张嘴读一遍，一张嘴，马上就能发现哪有问题，一边读一边改，坚持一段时间，效果就出来了。另外，还需要去读读名家名篇，精读，去分析人家的段落划分，去学习人家的遣词造句，然后在自己的作文写作中运用，这个也是需要坚持才会有效果，所以呢，要继续加油呀！