The life is a bottle of the five flavors, bottle of this the five flavors is constant overturn, meet every time teem thing of a few blazing, for me “ savours ” .
生活是个五味瓶，这个五味瓶时常打翻，每次都会倒出一些不寻常的东西，供我“品味”。
——”“ of Bi of “ Bi —— is breathed out. . . . . . ”“ Ye! ! ! ” . . . . . . Shrill whistle voice, the joyous laugh in the crowd, all sorts of sound such as the hurrah that cheering squad erupts, make huge playground changes former days the appearance of cold and cheerless, become voice noisy and confused, person bearer is gone to, peremptory like entering market, lively and extraordinary.
“哔——哔——”“哈哈......”“耶！！！”......尖利的哨子声，人群中的欢笑声，拉拉队爆发的欢呼声等各种声音，使硕大的操场一改往日冷清的面貌，变得人声鼎沸，人来人往，俨然像进了菜市场一样，热闹非凡。
I and a few classmates looked to meet first the match, eristic who who who ran the first, a few who who who runs in wait a moment finally, to later our interest holds high, follow them to run like fool simply, just they are in track, we stopped in field. But they are try to overtake each other in friendly emulation, each goes all out those who do one's best gallop, astride stride, spend rapid move about arm to promote high speed. And we! Laughing, shouting, bouncing move is ongoing, still can stop unexpectedly from time to time wait the associate from the back a moment! Ha! Resemble really it seems that dye-in-the-wood big goofy! And, arrive all the way from start after terminus, those players each is tired be flushed, the asthma that curved waist is helping big mouth of knee big mouth up is worn thick gas, some is so tired still that some resemble one beach mud, fall in ground of puff and blow of the puff and blow on the ground to breathing heavily directly, want to drink saliva to because breath is hurried,drink no less than going to; This compares with us rising is a sky really an underground: Because we are not the match, very relaxed, a bit tiredder stop, see others run far come suddenly again a sprint, be no good really still can copy a cutoff, arrived so terminal we still are heart of “ remain calm does not beat ” , drank dot water, scamper about does not know change to go where. . . . . .作文 WwW.ZuOwENbA.NeT
我和几个同学先看了会儿比赛，议论着谁谁谁跑了第一，几班的谁谁谁跑在了最后等等，到后来我们兴致高昂，索性像傻子一样跟着他们跑，只不过他们在跑道，我们在球场罢了。但他们是你追我赶，一个个拼尽全力的飞奔，跨着大步，为提高速度飞快摆臂。而我们呢！笑着，嚷着，跳跃着前进，时不时竟还会停下来等等后面的伙伴！哈哈！看起来真像个十足的大傻瓜！而且，从起点一路到终点后，那些选手一个个累得面红耳赤，弯着腰扶着膝盖大口大口的喘着粗气，有的还累得像一滩烂泥，直接倒在了地上呼哧呼哧地喘着，想喝口水都因呼吸急促喝不下去；这跟我们比起来真是一个天上一个地下：我们因为不是比赛，非常轻松，累一点就停下来，看别人都跑远了就又突然来个冲刺，实在不行还能抄个近路，所以到了终点我们依然是“面不改色心不跳”，喝了点水，又蹦蹦跳跳不知窜到哪儿去了......
mad on the playground hind, feel a bit tired gradually, leave to come in the grove of the middle school there. The rockery …… of Xun of the little bridge that there is small pond of high earthy slope, cross there, strange Shi Lin such beautiful scenery, nature is not we are enjoyed alone! Look! Had had a lot of “ clever person ” comes to this elfland first than us: Somebody mounted earthy slope, occupational upland, play removed gunfight; Somebody sits on Na Xiaoqiao to talk of everything; Somebody crouchs on the big stone of pond edge to fight brave with piscine battle of wits; Somebody mounts bony rockery, had not stood to break ” with respect to the situation “ with bear down on one with the weight of Mount Taishan surely come down, this wanting that place an a bit more handsome pose, but things go contrary to one's wishes, stand firm is done not have when coming down, true fact threw a buttock to crouch, that is helter-skelter appearance, offend so that everybody bursts out laughing ……
在操场上疯了一阵后，渐渐感到有点累了，就离开那儿来到了中学的小树林里。那儿有高高的土坡、横穿小池塘的小桥、怪石嶙峋的假山……如此的美景，自然不是我们独享喽！看！已经有许多“聪明人”比我们先来到这仙境了：有人爬上了土坡，占领了高地，玩起了枪战；有人坐在那小桥上谈天说地；有人蹲在池塘边的大石头上与鱼斗智斗勇；有人爬上嶙峋的假山，还未站定就以泰山压顶之势“砸”了下来，本想摆个帅一点的姿势，但事与愿违，下来时没站稳，实实摔了个屁股蹲，那狼狈样，惹得众人哈哈大笑……
Good time always is so brief, flash went one day again. Nevertheless, those who be worth to rejoice is, in this rapid day, I had taken a paragraph of good memory.
美好的时光总是那么短暂，一晃一天又过去了。不过，值得庆幸的是，在这飞快的一天里，我已经捕捉到了一段美好的回忆。
Author: Zhang Yue
作者：张粤
[Directive teacher: Zhang Xueqin]
[指导老师：章雪琴]
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导师点评：
Zhang Yue's classmate, see this your composition, the teacher also feels such one day passes quite quickly, happy days always escapes quickly. Composition language is vivid and humorous, lively and interesting, let a teacher see a happy child. The composition is written should be to be in your activity that games is not an athlete this day, you resemble the bird that is put to fly, need not play the game, OK and free land moves back and forth in campus. The composition is in details picture to make more composition figure, narrative and vivid. But the teacher always feels, the center of the composition some come loose, not quite clear, a lot of things pile up together, appear without foreword, messy. Every thing can make the person experiences joy, but between composition paragraph and paragraph contact some lesser. Do you feel?
张粤同学，看完你的这篇作文，老师也觉得这样的一天过得挺快，快乐的时光总是快快地溜走。作文语言生动幽默，活泼有趣，让老师看到了一个快乐的孩子。作文写得应该是在运动会这天不是运动员的你们的活动，你们就像被放飞的鸟儿，不用参加比赛，可以自由地在校园里穿梭。作文多处细节描写使得作文形象，叙事生动。但老师总觉得，作文的中心有些散，不够明确，很多事情堆积在一起，就显得无序、凌乱。每件事都能使人感受到快乐，但作文段落与段落之间少了些联系。你觉得呢？