I often hear somebody to say: “ expends so large interest, climb the summit to see a landscape, still not be same hill, same water, what can look. ” and I want to say only: “ has you to experience a setback only, after entering the peak, ability experiences its real beauty. ”
我经常听到有人说：“费这么大劲儿，爬到山顶看风景，不还是一样的山，一样的水，有什么可看的。”而我只想说：“只有你经历挫折，登上山顶后，才能感受它真正的美。”
This day, I cherish curious mood to sit on the bus that leads to cottage hill. Pass through a window, I already can dimly the outline that sees hill, its all around mist of stratus of run upon layer, added a few minutes of mysterious color to it again.
这天，我怀着好奇的心情坐在通往庐山的大巴上。透过窗户，我已经能依稀的看出山的轮廓，它的四周萦绕着层层云雾，又给它增添了几分神秘的色彩。
Close, close! Those who pass two hours is bored to death, cottage hill the body of this lofty, appear eventually in us at the moment, if Pan Gu is general,stand erect is between day and ground. Enter a gate, we down the tourist guide how-to, ascended the first extremely step, it is then the 2nd extremely, triode …… all the way, what everywhere sees is a few strange stone, just as its name implies, stone of strange Shi Ji, about is admittedly peculiar. Look! Here what do this resemble? Resemble condition of a foolish but the giant panda of Ju. There what to resemble? Stand like a red-crowned crane over, wanting rise high into the air to hover ……
近了，近了！经过两个小时的百无聊赖，庐山这巍峨的身躯，终于呈现在我们眼前，就如盘古一般屹立在天与地之间。进入大门，我们顺着导游的指引，登上了第一极台阶，接着是第二极，第三极……一路上，随处可见的是一些奇石，顾名思义，奇石奇石，模样固然奇特。瞧！这边这块像什么？像一只憨态可掬的大熊猫。那儿的像什么？像一只仙鹤立在那儿，正要腾空翱翔呢……
In talking cheerfully and humourously, we come to half half way up the mountain insensibly, just began to still go, then, father mother stopped to chat, I also feel to appear after the foot, procrastinating 100 jins of heavy big iron balls, the foot is heavier and heavier, every make a move, very hard, also feel even breath difficult. Went a little while again, calcaneal became from a moment ago acid painful. Sun's rays right now also all the more dazzling, all the more sinister, the tourist is less and less also, their each streaming with sweat, the fan in the hand keeps brandish is worn. My face also is basked in aglowly, resemble two red apples, the hand keeps brushing the sweat that appears from the top of head bead, topple the mountains and overturn the seas is like in the abdomen like afflictive. Kink of my heart all the different kind, be halfway and return, it is difficult to be still greeted and go up? The sun is so poisonous, still did not climb. Be no good, good climb not easily here, how can you abandon? Think of here, I insist to carrying burning sun on the head, eventually, I am mounted eventually, immediately, a moment ago unwell feeling, the instant is blown by the cool wind place of the summit. Stand on the summit, whole earth take in everything in a glance, look at the “ country ” that this is hit by me, all the different kind in the heart sighs with emotion.
谈笑风生中，我们不知不觉来到了半山腰，刚开始还行，接着，爸爸妈妈停止了聊天，我也觉得脚后似乎，拖着个百斤重的大铁球，脚越来越重了，每走一步，都十分的艰难，就连呼吸也觉得困难了。又走了一会儿，脚后跟从刚才的酸变成了痛。太阳光此时也格外的刺眼，格外的毒辣，游客也越来越少了，他们个个汗流浃背，手中的扇子不停地挥舞着。我的脸也被晒得通红，像两个红苹果，手不停地擦着从头顶冒出的汗珠，腹中就如排山倒海般的难受。我内心万般纠结，是半途而返，还是迎难而上？太阳这么毒，还是别爬了。不行，好不容易爬到这儿，怎么能放弃呢？想到这儿，我坚持顶着烈日，终于，我终于爬上来了，顿时，刚才的不适感，瞬间被山顶的凉风所吹走。站在山顶上，整个大地一览无余，看着这被我打下的“江山”，心中万般感慨。
The setting sun falls on the west, horizon extensive gave blush, must go back. This day those who pass is really fast, hate to part with really, this lets the place that I grow.
夕阳西下，天边泛出了红晕，得回去了。这一天过的真快，真舍不得，这让我成长的地方。
Author: Yan Yawen
作者：严雅雯
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导师点评：
A course that composition young writer basically introduced him to mountaineer. Begin author opens the door see, enter continuously advocate gas is derivative article topic is very good. It is the course that young writer introduction mountaineers next. The author adopts behavioral picture language, depict still has bearing depict to show the overworked hardship that he mountaineers at that time. In the meantime, the author still answers oneself through ask oneself, will encourage oneself ceaselessly, him drive enters the peak. In depict process, the author still used rhetorical technique of the analogy, the overworked that land system reveals dramatic image to mountaineer at that time is difficult. After the author enters the peak, return express oneself comprehension and deep feeling. Terminal point, the author is summary full text more, sublimate gist, very good.
本篇作文小作者主要介绍了自己登山的经过。开头作者开门见，直入主气引出文章主题很好。接下来是小作者介绍登山的经过。作者通过动作描写语言，描写还有神态描写来表现出自己当时登山的劳累艰难。同时，作者还通过自问自答，不断来鼓励自己，激励自己登上山顶。描写过程中，作者还运用了比喻的修辞手法，生动形象地体现出当时登山的劳累艰苦。作者登上山顶后，还抒发了自己的感悟与感慨。结尾处，作者更是总结全文，升华主旨，很好。
Directive teacher: Zhang Xueqin
指导老师：章雪琴