“ alas ah, very difficult! ”“ looks quickly, cao Qian farsighted draw up the answer! ”…… well? We 4 (2) in the class how so lively? Tell you, what our class greeted a having sth new today is artful calculate at 24 o'clock.
“唉呀，好难呀！”“快看，曹谦睿写出答案了！”……咦？我们四（2）班里怎么这么热闹呢？告诉你吧，今天我们班迎来了一场别开生面的巧算24点。
Today's class group class, mr. Tang walks into a classroom to smiling to say: “ undertakes talent is performed today, who appears on the stage to be revealed first? ” I hurry raise one's hand, the hand is extended straight straightforward, the teacher calls me gladly to appear on the stage. She and I communicated, subsequently excited say: “ classmates, cao Qian's farsighted classmate compares classmate of as whole as us class ‘ to calculate opportunely today at 24 o'clock ’ ! ” classmates let, each flies off like preparation the force of bullet —— labor of bore of a gun is waited for hair, and I also set sb's teeth, everybody be eager for doing sth meets storm of this one brains.作文 wWw.ZUOweNbA.nEt
今天的班队课，唐老师走进教室微笑着说：“今天来进行才艺表演，谁先上台来展示一下？”我赶紧举手，手伸得笔直笔直的，老师高兴地叫我上台。她和我交流了一下，随后激动地说道：“同学们，今天曹谦睿同学将与我们全班同学比‘巧算24点’！”同学们一听，个个都像准备飞出枪膛的子弹——蓄势待发，而我也咬紧牙关，大家都摩拳擦掌迎接这一场头脑风暴。
Of “1vs41 calculate opportunely at 24 o'clock, begin now! Mr. ” is loud say. Our look focusing is on the chalk in teacher hand, my nerve begins to stretch tight closely. The 1st problem: 5, 7, 3, 3. After the teacher keeps this string of number, classmates became a pot of porridge-a complete mess with respect to chaos. Look: Their some both hands is holding head cudgel one's brains in the palm; Some frowns closely, how is knowing good; Returned some likelihoods to have a main threads of an affair, so rapid that on paper figure wears, calculate will calculate go calculating give 24…… to be in their can find no way out when, my situation with the as sudden as lightning drew up on blackboard 3×5=15, 15-7=8, 3×8=24. Admired smile was shown on the face of Mr. Tang, still be in keep applausing for me aside. In my heart secretly glad, simply sweet to mind.
“1vs41的巧算24点，现在开始！”老师大声说道。我们的目光都聚焦在老师手里的粉笔上，我的神经开始紧绷。第1题：5、7、3、3。老师写完这一串数字后，同学们就乱成了一锅粥。瞧：他们有的双手托着脑袋苦思冥想；有的紧皱眉头，不知如何是好；还有的可能有了点儿头绪，飞快得在纸上演算着，算来算去都算不出24……正在他们一筹莫展之时，我以迅雷不及掩耳之势在黑板上写出了3×5=15，15-7=8，3×8=24。唐老师的脸上露出了佩服的笑容，还在一旁不停地为我鼓掌。我的心里暗暗高兴，简直甜到心头。
Mr. Tang loud say: “1, 2, 3, 7. ” one's voice in speech just fell, yan Xinyi raised a hand, I still do not have reaction to come over! She is so self-confident that she say: “3×7=21, 21+2=23, 23+1=24. ” classmates cheer, I repent oneself get dizzy with success, make I missed this one victory.
唐老师又大声说道：“1、2、3、7。”话音刚落，严心怡就举起了手，我都还没反应过来呢！她自信得说：“3×7=21，21+2=23，23+1=24。”同学们欢呼起来，我懊悔自己的得意忘形，使我错失了这一场的胜利。
A path difficult problem is solved one by one by us, final the score of I and classmates with 3: 3 planish and end. Although be draw, but the fun that we experienced the competition. My hope calculates opportunely than next time on class group class again at 24 o'clock ……
一道道难题被我们一一解决，最终我和同学们的比分以3：3打平而告终。虽然是平局，但我们体会到了比赛的乐趣。我希望下次班队课上再来比一次巧算24点……
The author told about interesting riddle to us, the begin of the article very the attention that draws us, bring the view to the spot of game directly, very novel. In text, the author is very vivid to figure depict of the character, carry bearing depict of everybody and psychological picture, game intense reflect very with nervous atmosphere figure, show an author's very good writing strength. Article sentence is clear and coherent, clarity of train of thought, structural consecution. The proposal that gives a writer is, this is game, but the intention that the teacher has her certainly, what did you learn from inside the process of this game so, what is experienced particularly, these is in terminal when should do a summary, can promote a subject further so.
作者给我们讲述了一次有趣的智力游戏，文章的开头就很吸引我们的注意力，直接将目光引向游戏的现场，很新颖。在正文中，作者对于人物的形象描写非常生动，通过大家的神态描写及心理描写，将游戏的激烈和紧张氛围体现得很形象，展示出作者很好的写作功底。文章语句通顺，思路清晰，结构条理。给作者的建议是，这是一次游戏，但是老师一定有她的用意，所以你从这次游戏的过程中学习到了什么，有什么特别的感受，这些在结尾的时候要做一个总结，这样能进一步提升主题。