Jin Feng sends bright, it is a Tian Gaoyun's weak autumn, wipe away tears when me left when the my study, long elementary school that lived 6 years, an autumn wind general my insufflate a brand-new world. Everything is new here: New life, new environment, new teacher fellow student, new target and challenge. I marched toward a new chance to extricateoneself from an awkward position again on the road of life.
金风送爽，又是一个天高云淡的秋天，当我挥泪告别了我学习、生活了6年之久的小学时，一阵秋风将我吹进了一个崭新的世界。这里一切都是新的：新的生活、新的环境、新的老师同学、新的目标和挑战。我在人生的道路上又迈向了一个新台阶。
The first day when term begins formally in me, the sinfonia of the middle school is engraved here played. I rose early, because I know this is brand-new one day, I must receive it with a bouncy condition. In my stride campus you rise momently then, my middle school composition moved toward beautiful, endless a section of a highway. I entered a classroom. See everybody chats each other, although everybody has never met before, but what still chat is very happy.
在我正式开学的第一天，中学的序曲就在此刻奏响了。我早早地就起来了，因为我知道这是崭新的一天，我必须以一个精神饱满的状态去迎接它。在我迈进校园的你那一刻起，我的中学乐曲就走向了优美、漫长的路段了。我进入了教室。看到大家互相聊天，虽然大家素不相识，但依然聊的很开心。
Our classmaster is mathematical teacher, mathematical teacher is thin thin high, education is very rigorous, do not make careless. Our Chinese teacher is simpatico, the education humour of Chinese teacher is humor, often amuse so that everybody closes not approach mouth. Our English teacher is very strict, so some classmates do not like her, but the English level that yields me rose. The education of 3 teachers lets me shine at the moment, let me liked to go up immediately everything here.
我们的班主任是数学老师，数学老师瘦瘦高高的，教学很严谨，不犯一点马虎。我们的语文老师和蔼可亲，语文老师的教学幽默风趣，常常逗得大家合不拢嘴。我们的英语老师非常严格，所以有些同学就不喜欢她，但让我的英语水平提高了。三位老师的教学让我眼前一亮，顿时让我喜欢上了这里的一切。
Another very short time, half semester went, classmates also were known each other, get along very harmoniously. Everybody is even more deep also to the teacher's understanding, more respect and make allowances for a teacher. I also acquired a lot of things here.
又一个眨眼间，半个学期过去了，同学们也都互相认识了，相处得十分融洽。大家对老师的了解也越发深刻，更加尊重和体谅老师了。我也在这里学到了很多东西。
Imperceptible, the song of the middle school had undertaken 1/6, there still is that incomputable hard dangerous and difficult road later. What still have that preliminary decision life is medium one's deceased father, arrived in those days, whole song had climax share. Want to do good dribs and drabs now so, for before long in the future ready-made, for the person unripe next step has made sufficient preparation.
不知不觉，中学的歌曲已经进行到了六分之一，之后还有那数不清的艰难险阻。还有那初步决定人生的中考，到了那时，整首歌就进行到了高潮部分。所以现在要做好点点滴滴，为不久的将来做好准备，为人生的下一个台阶做好充分的准备。
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